Some more of my comic script. This is actually from the beginning, so hopefully it'll make sense. 

If the scene sounds familiar...well, it is. I drastically revised the script from Chapter 1, so hopefully this is a bit more interesting and better paced.  

Chapter 1: The Man in the Thicket (revised)

(scene: Gehnn at the stall. It’s dead. She is very bored.)

(Yul comes up behind her and grabs her shoulders.)

Yul: GOTCHA!

Heh heh heh, sorry, sorry. You just…sorry. You were there and I couldn’t resist.

So….slow day, I take it?

Gehnn: Mmmrrgh.

Yul: Heh. Well, it’s a rest day. What else did you expect?

Gehnn: I didn’t expect anything. Min said we could do with the extra hours.

Yul: Selling fruit and tea to…..air?

Gehnn: Not my idea.

Yul: Hmm. Why do you work for him again?

Gehnn: I pay my rent and eat well, thank you very much.

Yul: On what he’s paying you?

Gehnn: He pays fine. Better than what you get paid.

Yul:…..true.

Gehnn: Besides, he actually teaches me things. I’ll have a stand of my own one of these days.

Yul: Oh yeah? And what’ll you sell, Miss Eyepatch?

Gehnn: I’ll sell freshly carved wooden legs. Finest make in the land. Visitors will come from all corners of the Continent just to get a glimpse of the fabled woodwork of my wooden legs. And then you’ll gaze upon my gloriously wealthy visage and weep from awe.

Yul: You have a strange mind, Gehnn.

Gehnn: Sure I do. I’ve got all this time to daydream.

Yul: Hm. Well, you know, Gehnn, you don’t have to stick around here all day.

Gehnn: Oh, yes I do.

Yul: I mean, it’s not like Min is going to just appear around the corner, ri-

Min: Hey, GEHNN!

Gehnn: See?

Yul: Woah.

(Min runs up to them)

Min: Lucky day, Gehnn – you’re free to go. I have a customer who wants to come down and talk terms with me, and by the looks of it, we’re not getting much business anyway.

Gehnn: Gods bless you, Min. You’re a treat.

Min: Yeah, yeah, just get out of here.

Gehnn: Supper at Moiah’s tonight, Yul?

Yul: Yeah, sure. We’ve only got one more shipment in, and it looks like they’ve got enough hands to handle it already.

Gehnn: Great. See ya!

Yul: Wait, where are you going?

Gehnn: Out for a walk. Need to get outside the walls for a bit.

Yul: But there’s a warning out –

Gehnn: Don’t worry, I’ll be fine!

Yul: Wait, Gehnn-

Gehnn: See you at Moiah’s, Yul!

(Yul and Min stand there for a minute.)

Yul: What goes on in that girl’s head…

Min: Funny you should be the one wondering about that.

Yul: Funny you should talk and think I give a rat’s -

 (scene: Gehnn walks through the city. She passes by some arguing men, and a bunch of kids running through the street. She comes up to the gate.)

Guard: You know there’s a warning out for skin hounds, right?

Gehnn: Yeah, yeah, I know. I’m not going out that far, it’s fine.

Guard: Hm. Well, it’s your hide, I suppose. And it’s not like there was a pack reported or anything.

Just stick to the creek and you should be fine. Don’t think they’ll be coming down that far from their caves.

Gehnn: Right.

Guard: Here ya go. Just be back before sundown.

Gehnn: No problem. Thank you!

Guard: Yeah, yeah.

(Gehn walks down a path. It is pretty. She looks to her left, and walks off the path. She comes to a small patch of bushes and other assorted plants. She kneels down and starts cutting off leaves from one of the bushes.)

(She hears a noise, turns. Nothing. She turns back, still alert, and cuts herself on the clippers. She eyes it distastefully, and then gathers up her things and makes to head out. She heads down the path, and suddenly sees a skin hound right by the path. She freezes, and then looks behind her. There are more coming out of the bushes, setting on their haunches. )

(she stands there. One of them leaps forward. She leaps out of their grasp, and starts running. They chase her. She falls, and is cornered. One leaps on her, and suddenly is blown off. She looks around. A man has his hand raised. There is air whirling around him. The skin hounds are blown away. They run away.)

 (Gehnn stares at him. The man stumbles forward, and falls to his knees. Gehnn rushes over to him. They look at each other, and then the man reaches out and touches Gehnn's forehead.)

(She suddenly has the image of kneeling in an empty space, her surroundings melting away. A soft whispering speaks in her ear. Gehnn looks confused, and then speaks, slowly.)

Gehnn: R....Rrrex?

 (She sees the eyes behind the mask's lenses - they are half-shut, exhausted. She stares at him, and then, slowly, reaches out to touch his face. He collapses.)

(Gehnn stares at him for a few more seconds. Then, she reaches down, and pulls him up, draping him over her back. She is surprisingly strong for her size. As an afterthought, she reaches down and picks up his staff, and with that, she takes off with him towards the city.)

(She comes to the gate, banging on it. It opens, and the guard comes out, looking concerned.)

Guard: What -

(she rushes past. The guard looks astounded. His partner comes out, staring after Gehnn.)

(Gehnn takes Rex to the hospital. She bursts through the door, Rex drooping over her shoulders)

Doctor: Well, hello, Gehnn.